Comments on: Top Three Short Scenes

By: Brian Burke

Brian Burke — Fri, 25 Dec 2009 14:01:34 +0000

I thought all three were great, any writer knows how much time and effort it takes to pull this off. Each writer had a “voice”, that’s what pulled me into the scenes.

Kudos to those who entered, I spent at least three hours on mine, and I’m sure I’m not alone. It was a good exercise and a nice chance to read other writer’s works. Congrats to everyone.

By: Mark

Mark — Sat, 19 Dec 2009 05:32:50 +0000

Dear Wong,
I would not call any of these writers stupid, seeing as you cannot even use correct grammar.
Go Pat!

By: Wong

Wong — Fri, 18 Dec 2009 02:07:08 +0000

All three terrible. Stupid american, you fail at everything ha ha!

By: Phoe

Phoe — Thu, 17 Dec 2009 18:29:58 +0000

Julie

Not bad.
Not my style.
But an enjoyable read, all three.

By: Mitch

Mitch — Thu, 17 Dec 2009 15:04:59 +0000

NICK had all the elements down correctly. It gave a great insight to man who is over 2,000 years old having a mid-life crisis. Denial, abandonment issues and taking his frustrations out on someone who has supported his efforts for centuries makes this piece work. In any script if you can get down character set-up, environment and motivation in one single opening page…you’ve nailed it. This is what editors and producers want.

By: Mark

Mark — Thu, 17 Dec 2009 04:23:58 +0000

Martin B, not sure if reading is important when judging these sorts of things, I mean I always thought it was; but clearly it’s not for you because TMZ has “felicities” is in the first paragraph.

TMZ was awesome!!

By: Lisa

Lisa — Thu, 17 Dec 2009 03:57:15 +0000

Patrick Bonner is an Aztec warrior.

By: C Roy

C Roy — Thu, 17 Dec 2009 00:27:24 +0000

Nick was, by far, the best out of the top three. So it went a little long when in “12 point Courier”. It still met all the other criteria. It is a creative, fun, scene that felt like it took a good amount of time and effort to create. The other two scenes were “OK” but Nick was really great.

By: Martin B

Martin B — Wed, 16 Dec 2009 17:54:23 +0000

NICK expanded to a page and a quarter when written in standard 12 point Courier; TMZ did not contain the word ‘felicity;’ MEGA misspells ‘reins’ twice and drops Blitzen from Santa’s team of reindeer without explanation. Hmmmmmmm…..

By: Betsy Lussier

Betsy Lussier — Wed, 16 Dec 2009 15:43:36 +0000

Way to go Patrick Bonner!

By: Kim Nunley

Kim Nunley — Wed, 16 Dec 2009 14:49:28 +0000

Man… all three did an awesome job!

By: JB

JB — Wed, 16 Dec 2009 14:30:19 +0000

Great job, Patrick! Keep going after your passion!

By: JJ

JJ — Tue, 15 Dec 2009 23:28:14 +0000

2012 and the Aztec Calendar??? Ha ha ha…
What’s that, like a Jewish Christmas?

By: Patrick O'Riley

Patrick O'Riley — Tue, 15 Dec 2009 20:21:02 +0000

Kudos to K.G. Madman!