Top Four Pear-Slay-Thickening Short Scenes!
Hello everybody! I have selected these top four short scenes from the SLEW that came in on Saturday afternoon! These are in the top four because they effing entertained me. I know we’re supposed to have three but I just couldn’t resist these entries! They used the key words in a clever context, they were inventive and they made me laugh. Job well done, Richard Sheehy, Paul Zeidman, Trevor Mayes and Richard Prosser – you guys slay me!!
Voting Guidelines: All right now guys, remember – we’re looking for clever use of the key words, abiding by the rules to create a scene that effing entertained you, that had a set up, a complication and a resolution. The polls close on Friday January 29th at 8pm PST.
A Ripping Yarn by Robert Prosser
Marriage Dance by Richard Sheehy
Homonysts Anonymous by Paul Zeidman
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Hay Paul, theems two me you getaway whiff word’ths, thuper funny mate.
My vote is for Marrakech as it is more visual as a script, but Homonysts Anonymous should get an honorable mention!
They were all very entertaining! I vote for Marrakech!
This is the second time I’ve made it to the final three (or four)of one of these contests, only to be crushed by a much more imaginative scene! I really enjoyed all of them but “Homonysts Anonymous” made me laugh out loud! Great job, all!
I gotta go “Marrakech” 1st, “Homonysts Anonymous” 2nd, “Marriage Dance” 3rd and Ripping Yarn 4th. Rationale? All were entertaining and 1-page – a feat in itself. But Marrakech had the fullest picture of writing talent, with a novel setting and great scene & character descriptions as well a good dialogue. Homonysts hinged on the dialogue and for that was creative and edgy. Marriage dance had a nice surprise ending image that revived an otherwise, relatively common setting and convo. And the ‘pear’ in Ripping Yarn was just kind of thrown in there as a gimme. “Everything going pear-shaped,” not being a real phrase or an easily conjurable image. But … all were great and yes, just effing entertaining as all get-out!
I’d put Marrakech first. Homonysts Anonymous is very clever, but wouldn’t work as a filmed scene.
Oh, and to be fair to Robert Prosser, something “going pear-shaped” is a perfectly common idiom in Britain (and perhaps in Australia too?).
My vote is for Mr. Zeidman’s scene. Very clever.
All are decent but Marrakesh rocks!!
@ Iain, I’m Aussie and things are always going pear shaped on me. So yep It’s as fair dinkum as putting dead horse on a meat pie. Anyway I’m as dry as a dead dingo’s donga so I’ll hit the frog and toad.